Stephanie - dance //

Darren - kid //

Katie - alcoholic //

Sam - family room //

Alexa - home //

Other Sam - roots //

Michael - disconnect //

Alissa – I loved the softball field as your place, and how it almost sounded like a bad breakup when you decided you no longer wanted to play.  You've got the sappy song, some emotional poetry, and the whole feel really works well to add depth to your twitterive, I think.  One thing I think could be interesting is if you touch on some of the stages of breakups a bit more, like how when a relationship firsts ends, you're just pissed off at the person and everything they've ever done.  But once you cool down and some time has passed, your feelings might change, and if you're not in a relationship at the time, you find yourself pining for that old relationship and the comfort of familiarity.  An, "Oh, Softball, How I Miss You!" poem might work, because it definitely sounds like there's a piece of you that's missing since you stopped playing.  Have you thought about going back?

Dave – your chaos twitterive is . . . well, it's chaotic.  I think I know what you were shooting for (because my writing process is similarly off the wall and kinda out there, so I feel you on that), but I'm not sure you presented it in the best way possible to make it something viewers can easily navigate.  Right now, it's all sort've clustered together and it's difficult to tell where we should start reading and what order we should cycle through the different pieces.  

One suggestion that occurred to me after class: have you ever done any Prezi work?  It's like powerpoint 2.0 if you haven't, and it lets you make some really killer slideshows with all sorts of movement built in to the presentation.  If you start posting your writing samples on a Prezi document, you can kind of jumble them up on the main page, or set invisible frames so that some some slides aren't centered or have text competing for attention.  The movement, if you do it up right, will also give the viewer a brief sense of disorientation.  Like, "how did I get here?"  This will give us that sense of chaos I think you want, but because you can control the slides and direct the journey, you can make it so that the reader doesn't have to figure out where to go.  

Christie – your Outer Banks twitterive was amazing, so much so that I really don't have anything to add to it other than the few things we talked about in class, like moving the days counter to the bottom of the page, and maybe including the speech your grandfather made like the Prof suggested.  Really sensational work, though, it was enjoyable and fun to look at.  If that was you're rough draft, you're in great shape.  And good job, now I can't wait for my own summer vacation!

Rebcca - past, present, future are a really neat concept to take into the twitterive, and the framework for your site as you've laid it out is really well put together.  It's eye catching without being over the top, and the pictures of different people/things and the blurbs for your roommates are nice, different little genres that both make use of photographs.  I like it a lot.  But like you suggested and the Professor commented on in class, I think the order of how you arrange the info might need to be tweaked a bit.  Whether that's putting all the past stories in one section, then going to the present, and then the future, or if you align the blurbs differently so that it looks like this,

that's up to you.  You've got all the pieces, though, and right now it's more about putting those pieces together to make something whole.  I don't foresee any major changes other than organization, and that's more than I can say for my own twitterive.